Thank you for taking the course and submitting your project.
In my opinion, you have some high points and some low points here, and I think the series would be better with some cuts.
You start off very well, with the portrait of the girl in a cafe, the introspective look and the colors of the door on the right.
The next photo has the same mood, I imagine it's the same place, and I like how you captured the people spontaneously - and better yet, without cell phones.
I'm not sure about photos 3 and 4 in the series. In photo 3, the paintings are more present than the characters, so for me it's a type of photo whose merit is more the painter's than yours. It would need to have stronger characters and a clearer interaction between them and the artwork.
In 4 (Original Coffee), I feel you are too far away from the scene. The street in the foreground is too bright and distracting.
In 5 and 7 you return to these introspective moments in cafes, and I think your work could actually be about that alone. I see much more unity in the work when I just look at 1, 2, 5, 7 and 14, although I also really like photos 12 (skirt) and 15 (bike).
You have undoubtedly captured interesting scenes in a personal and visually appealing way. I believe that, over time, it will become clearer to you what the core of your work is, the line to be followed.
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Teacher Plushello, @marica_dibartolo .
Thank you for taking the course and submitting your project.
In my opinion, you have some high points and some low points here, and I think the series would be better with some cuts.
You start off very well, with the portrait of the girl in a cafe, the introspective look and the colors of the door on the right.
The next photo has the same mood, I imagine it's the same place, and I like how you captured the people spontaneously - and better yet, without cell phones.
I'm not sure about photos 3 and 4 in the series. In photo 3, the paintings are more present than the characters, so for me it's a type of photo whose merit is more the painter's than yours. It would need to have stronger characters and a clearer interaction between them and the artwork.
In 4 (Original Coffee), I feel you are too far away from the scene. The street in the foreground is too bright and distracting.
In 5 and 7 you return to these introspective moments in cafes, and I think your work could actually be about that alone. I see much more unity in the work when I just look at 1, 2, 5, 7 and 14, although I also really like photos 12 (skirt) and 15 (bike).
You have undoubtedly captured interesting scenes in a personal and visually appealing way. I believe that, over time, it will become clearer to you what the core of your work is, the line to be followed.
Congratulations.
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