Well-adapted story, captivating narrative, good page layouts - page 1 could be improved with less panels overlapping - clean and expressive inks with a good story twist at the end.
I suggest having all the narrator's text at the same size, and then the giant's text with another larger font, to reinforce the sensation that they speak louder. The background lettering on page 1 can be improved, better integrating it to the artwork and lastly, also on page 1, the onomatopeias are a bit too integrating, hindering the legibility.
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samhart
Teacher PlusWell-adapted story, captivating narrative, good page layouts - page 1 could be improved with less panels overlapping - clean and expressive inks with a good story twist at the end.
I suggest having all the narrator's text at the same size, and then the giant's text with another larger font, to reinforce the sensation that they speak louder. The background lettering on page 1 can be improved, better integrating it to the artwork and lastly, also on page 1, the onomatopeias are a bit too integrating, hindering the legibility.
Good brushwork!
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