The narrative, cinematic shots and colors are just perfect.
In my opinion, the only thing you can improve is the expression of the lines and make the shapes of the colors more loose.
In frame number 5, where there is a young man sitting with a bottle of water, it is seen that the clouds are outlined with a black line. Try to reduce the lines in the background as much as possible, so that the figure gains in importance.
The general atmosphere is fine. I can feel everything is okay in this morning, in the way that an advertising commercial should be: the perfect world of consumerism.
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Hi tkachenkomawa
The narrative, cinematic shots and colors are just perfect.
In my opinion, the only thing you can improve is the expression of the lines and make the shapes of the colors more loose.
Davis Lisboa
https://www.davislisboa.com
In frame number 5, where there is a young man sitting with a bottle of water, it is seen that the clouds are outlined with a black line. Try to reduce the lines in the background as much as possible, so that the figure gains in importance.
The general atmosphere is fine. I can feel everything is okay in this morning, in the way that an advertising commercial should be: the perfect world of consumerism.
Davis Lisboa
https://www.davislisboa.com
Crisp lines, clean composition and vibrant colors. The narrative is very clear
@d_adonis thanks! 😊
@davislisboa Thanks for the feedback! Made some changes, hope it's better this way
Posso fazer uma proposta para você e redesenhar um quadro do teu storyboard?
Posso dar um ejemplo de como se poderia fazer que as linhas ficassem mais soltas?
@davislisboa Yes, of course
Mañana te dibujo un ejemplo...
Oi @tkachenkomawa
O que você pensa se o storyboard tivesse umas linhas um pouco mais expressivas?
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https://www.domestika.org/pt/projects/1253427-meu-projeto-do-curso-ilustracao-de-storyboard-com-procreate
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