Congratulations on all the finished pages! I like the digital version, it retains a lot of the one you showed us on paper. The color palette works very well, I like that blue with the pink. As I mentioned in the forum, I think I would adjust some issues in the text that are repeated in the image. For example when you mention the hostel and you see it written in the vignette. Later the same thing happens when they go to eat. I think it can be modified very easily. For example, if in the drawing you can see that it says "Subway" instead of repeating Subway in the text, you can say that they went to eat sandwiches. I think it is always important to take care of these details, because for the one who is reading it can become redundant. Just by changing a word we already avoid that information overlap. Think continue the story? I think there are several questions that leave intrigues: how did these friends meet, what is the relationship between them? What do you do in your daily life, while you are not traveling? I hope this story continues to grow!
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mariajluque
Teacher PlusCongratulations on all the finished pages! I like the digital version, it retains a lot of the one you showed us on paper. The color palette works very well, I like that blue with the pink. As I mentioned in the forum, I think I would adjust some issues in the text that are repeated in the image. For example when you mention the hostel and you see it written in the vignette. Later the same thing happens when they go to eat. I think it can be modified very easily. For example, if in the drawing you can see that it says "Subway" instead of repeating Subway in the text, you can say that they went to eat sandwiches. I think it is always important to take care of these details, because for the one who is reading it can become redundant. Just by changing a word we already avoid that information overlap. Think continue the story? I think there are several questions that leave intrigues: how did these friends meet, what is the relationship between them? What do you do in your daily life, while you are not traveling? I hope this story continues to grow!
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